PERSEPHONE
A new dawn
a new song,
singing for the rain,
for the pain
that I once knew;
that is now a melody,
an incoherent rhapsody,
the voice given
by the gods
demands to be heard.
My words are not
my own;
they belong
to the one
with poisoned lips,
who with the ink
of six pomegranate seeds
stained my pen,
and gave me birth.
Behold the woman,
turned a poet.
Behold the goddess,
who traps the moment.
Behold the captive,
who longs for respite.
Will you read my poem please?
I read your poem, and each stanza painted a vivid image. It was truly captivating. Then I read each comment, and tried to see, through their eyes. I couldn’t help feeling like I was missing something. You made very specific references. Then I noticed the name... Persephone.
Greek mythology. The goddess of fertility and queen of the underworld. It suddenly all makes sense. Truly beautiful piece. Thank you.
Temari
Reply:Like a germ. It is infectuous. I like the spread. Distances that you serve in this woman, who I should think is your mother, is a gesture as it is a serpentine blunder, like the birth of you, the woman is a goddess trapping the moment and is caught in the choronic glare of the headlights of a sixteen wheeler.
Reply:Behold the pain
that becomes her
the newborn poet
not by choice
Stained by the poison
of the messenger of pain
via the deception
some call love
Deceived by kind words
and a touch of the palm
a smile of a cherub
the heart of a demon
Live now young poet
forget not the pain once felt
but remember the new feeling
of life and hardships
the birth of a poet
Reply:this is a very strong poem. it gets your mindthinking and is inspritaional. the words all go together so perfectly and they just work so well and make this poem so much stronger. i would keep on writing poems if you have just started and if this is something you have been doing for awhile, then keep up the good work :-)
Reply:It's a great poem and i like it very much. I like to request u to take more time to make it a master piece. Pls don't take it negative. It's really a superb strong poem. Keep writng ma'am. and do let me about about others poems too.
Reply:supporting your dreams will keep you.
and waking up to your dreams is %26gt;%26gt; life.
...that pomegranate jelly is a labor of love
to make... and taste. more toast (poems) please!
Reply:Behold the one who reads and understands, for it is she who really might know your innermost secrets.
Reply:It's good. But I can't find your pattern. You start out rhyming but then you stop. Oh well, it's still good.
Reply:So wonderful...
You need to find some reliable lips...
Reply:This is great! When is the movie coming out?
Reply:live it.
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